Incorporated feedback from -advocacy for 2016-10-27 release

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@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 2016-10-27 Cumulative Update Release
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-The PostgreSQL Global Development Group has released an update to all supported versions of our database system, including 9.6.1, 9.5.5, 9.4.10, 9.3.15, 9.2.19, and 9.1.24.  This is also the last release for the PostgreSQL 9.1 as it is now end-of-life. This release fixes two issues that can cause data corruption, which are described in more detail below. It also patches a number of other bugs reported over the last three months. Users who are affected by the data corruption issues should update immediately. Other users should plan to update at the next convenient downtime.
+The PostgreSQL Global Development Group has released an update to all supported versions of our database system, including 9.6.1, 9.5.5, 9.4.10, 9.3.15, 9.2.19, and 9.1.24.  This is also the last release for the PostgreSQL 9.1 series as it is now end-of-life. This release fixes two issues that can cause data corruption, which are described in more detail below. It also patches a number of other bugs reported over the last three months. Users who are affected by the data corruption issues should update immediately. Other users should plan to update at the next convenient downtime.
 
 WAL-logging of truncated relations
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@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ If you are using a big-endian machine (many non-Intel architectures are big-endi
 Bug Fixes and Improvements
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-In addition to the above, this update also fixes a number of bugs reported in the last few months. Some of these issues affect only version 9.6.1, but many affect all supported versions.  There are more than 50 fixes provided in this release, including:
+In addition to the above, this update also fixes a number of bugs reported in the last few months. Some of these issues affect only the 9.6 series, but many affect all supported versions.  There are more than 50 fixes provided in this release, including:
 
 * Fix use-after-free hazard in execution of aggregate functions using DISTINCT, which could lead to crashes
 * Fix incorrect handling of polymorphic aggregates used as window functions, which could lead to crashes
@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ In addition to the above, this update also fixes a number of bugs reported in th
 * Support OpenSSL 1.1.0
 * Install TAP test infrastructure so that it's available for extension testing
 * Several fixes for logical WAL decoding and replication slots
-* Several fixes for minor issues in pg_dump, pg_xlogdump, and pg_upgrad
+* Several fixes for minor issues in pg_dump, pg_xlogdump, and pg_upgrade
 * Several fixes for minor issues in the query planner and in the output of EXPLAIN
 * Several fixes for timezone support